Friday, September 11, 2009

Antidote # 3

It was a hot summer day and my mom was watering her garden. As the day went by the weather keep getting hotter. Casing her to get cranky. "Kids" she shouted. Fill up the little pool right now. When I say little pool I mean the ones you use for pre-schoolers. My brother and I the got the pool out of the garage blew it up and filled it with water.
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4 comments:

  1. JoaquinSeptember 13, 2009 at 1:01 PM

    Moms could be a little vicious sometimes.Look at the last sentence of your paragraph have a little mistake putting the I front of got making it sound a litle funny.All in all good anecdote

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  2. CwiteeeenloveSeptember 13, 2009 at 9:50 PM

    It seems to me as if your mom love doing her things no matter how hard the conditions may be. Your mom seems to be hard working.

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  3. FeliciaSeptember 14, 2009 at 12:44 PM

    Your mom does seem very hardworking and she never gives up even if something is bothering her. You should add a little more detail into your story though.

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  4. ThompsonSeptember 17, 2009 at 8:55 PM

    And then what happened? Did she get in the pool herself? Develop these stories a little more, so that they really come out sounding like anecdotes.

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